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9.3 Analysis and Revision of Workplace Document (Informal Report) Draft 1

9.3 Analysis and Revision of Workplace Document (Informal Report) Draft 1

Q Find a sample document from your field or profession that you think needs revision. It could even be one that you wrote recently. If you do not have a real document from your current profession or field, search the web for an example of one that is similar to one you may encounter. Then, in a 3-4 page informal report, explain the purpose, audience, and context of this document, point out its strengths and weaknesses, and make recommendations for how you would revise it to make it more effective and efficient. You should also implement those recommendations and reference me to the Appendix of the report that includes the "Original" document and your "Revised" document. Submit your informal report with the "Original" and "Revised" document (either at the end of the report or as separate attachments) as an MS Word doc to me here.

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The document chosen by me is an official or formal memorandum meant for the topmost officials of one of the departments of government of America. The document has been prepared by a physician who looks after the health of the president commander of the U.S. Navy. The purpose of the document is to ensure that there is proper and clear clarification about the inappropriate timeline which had been provided to the president by the physician earlier. There had been inappropriate summarization of the health of the President by the physician. Therefore, the physician had to rectify the mistake by preparing and sending the memorandum. The audience of the memorandum is the individual designated as the assistant of the president of the U.S. Navy. This is because the subject matter of the memorandum can be addressed to the president of the U.S. Navy later on by the assistant. The president has to segregate time for looking into this matter. The other audience of the memorandum is the secretary of the press department of the White House. This is because there has to be public declaration of the mistake and the rectification of the mistake made by the physician in addressing the inappropriate timeline for the president. The audience is also the general public because of the general public also has to be informed by the physician about the mistakes made in summarizing the report of the president of the U.S. Navy initially.